Thursday, August 18, 2011

Is this a good prologue and beginning to my story?

I think it's great! There are a few grammar errors, but it's really good =) But for the second paragraph maybe you should make the buildup a bit longer..like the buildup to the ending where it says 'now staring wide-eyed at the beautiful face of my evil Mother.' Otherwise I love it and I would love to read more!

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